My frustrations this transfer window in a (bad) rap

Originally Posted by Aman27deep

If even one person liked it, then it was a success. Haters will always hate.

they are just patronising you, I'm keeping it real.
cause the lines you spitting i just don't feel

yo yo check it

we've got bitches in midfield trying to get it on
t-clev and ando should be half past gone
we got rooney in a huff and throwing a strop
we've got moyes in charge when it should've been kloop

yo yo come at me

I trust in Moyes, he was Fergie's choice
But his coaching appointments, smack of jobs for the boys
And our transfer action's been a joke this window
Getting played left and right like a Super Nintendo
First Thiago chose Bayern, which was so unexpected
Then we tried to buy Cesc, but got flat rejected
Signing sponsorship deals and new merch for the megastore
That's fine as it goes, but it's centre-mids we're all looking for
Yeah our new CEO, he might've been a top banker
I really don't give a shit, just buy some players you £#%&!er
But my worry's still Kaggers and the shit that he's facin'
With his Japanese nature, 'ternalising frustrations

And I'm out

Originally Posted by Serenity Now

I trust in Moyes, he was Fergie's choice
But his coaching appointments, smack of jobs for the boys
And our transfer action's been a joke this window
Getting played left and right like a Super Nintendo
First Thiago chose Bayern, which was so unexpected
Then we tried to buy Cesc, but got flat rejected
Signing sponsorship deals and new merch for the megastore
That's fine as it goes, but it's centre-mids we're all looking for
Yeah our new CEO, he might've been a top banker
I really don't give a shit, just buy some players you £#%&!er
But my worry's still Kaggers and the shit that he's facin'
With his Japanese nature, 'ternalising frustrations

And I'm out

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=icxdL0zvid8

'Cause Woodward just a half-arsed [Gary] Cook,
Scared to buy, not scared to have a look,
He shook

I'm down to my last cigarette
When I realise that Anderon won't be it
I've got freckles

Originally Posted by Serenity Now

'Cause Woodward just a half-arsed [Gary] Cook,
Scared to buy, not scared to have a look,
He shook

"There's numerous ways you can choose to earn funds,
Tour Bangkok, sell Ronaldo, issue bonds"

fund and bond
they just don't rhyme
the watcher
commits hiphop crime

hear me now

Originally Posted by armchair

fund and bond
they just don't rhyme
the watcher
commits hiphop crime

hear me now

It was horrific, nqat. I feel like the chap in the sun glasses in this, just walks away is disgrace :shakehead:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4hbwdAOogBw

Originally Posted by armchair

fund and bond
they just don't rhyme
the watcher
commits hiphop crime

hear me now

Originally Posted by Harri Jaffa

I'm down to my last cigarette
When I realise that Anderon won't be it
I've got freckles

Originally Posted by Harri Jaffa

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Originally Posted by The Watcher

It was horrific, nqat. I feel like the chap in the sun glasses in this, just walks away is disgrace :shakehead:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4hbwdAOogBw

You've posted that up before. Pure class. It's what, at one time, I imagined all of ny to be like.

Originally Posted by Serenity Now

I trust in Moyes, he was Fergie's choice
But his coaching appointments, smack of jobs for the boys
And our transfer action's been a joke this window
Getting played left and right like a Super Nintendo
First Thiago chose Bayern, which was so unexpected
Then we tried to buy Cesc, but got flat rejected
Signing sponsorship deals and new merch for the megastore
That's fine as it goes, but it's centre-mids we're all looking for
Yeah our new CEO, he might've been a top banker
I really don't give a shit, just buy some players you £#%&!er
But my worry's still Kaggers and the shit that he's facin'
With his Japanese nature, 'ternalising frustrations

And I'm out

"You know the drama, the no buys, the doom shit,
The type of summer that breaks shoot crews like toothpicks,
Start with wishes, of midfielders who ain't bitches,
End up happy just to see Nani rock another goon flip."

Originally Posted by The Watcher

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=icxdL0zvid8

epic tune

Originally Posted by Serenity Now

I trust in Moyes, he was Fergie's choice
But his coaching appointments, smack of jobs for the boys
And our transfer action's been a joke this window
Getting played left and right like a Super Nintendo
First Thiago chose Bayern, which was so unexpected
Then we tried to buy Cesc, but got flat rejected
Signing sponsorship deals and new merch for the megastore
That's fine as it goes, but it's centre-mids we're all looking for
Yeah our new CEO, he might've been a top banker
I really don't give a shit, just buy some players you £#%&!er
But my worry's still Kaggers and the shit that he's facin'
With his Japanese nature, 'ternalising frustrations

And I'm out

Oh Deepers.

Originally Posted by Aman27deep

I'm only a writer

That's debatable pal.

It's far too wordy. It's not enough for the last words in the line to rhyme if nobody could get them out to a beat.

'His name was Alex from Scotland and he led us to the kind of glory you could only dream of in your wildest dreams and not even tell anybody because they would sound so crazy-

'And now we have Moyes who is underwhelming to say the least and results have been so much worse than anyone could have expected or feared even in a worst-case scenario and now our future is hazy'

Well actually that works. But in general yours is too wordy.

Originally Posted by Grimson

That's debatable pal.

It's far too wordy. It's not enough for the last words in the line to rhyme if nobody could get them out to a beat.

'His name was Alex from Scotland and he led us to the kind of glory you could only dream of in your wildest dreams and not even tell anybody because they would sound so crazy-

'And now we have Moyes who is underwhelming to say the least and results have been so much worse than anyone could have expected or feared even in a worst-case scenario and now our future is hazy'

Well actually that works. But in general yours is too wordy.

Constructive criticism from one writer to another.

Originally Posted by Aman27deep

Constructive criticism from one writer to another.

Originally Posted by Grimson